Writing

Student Targets I am able to: * record thoughts, feelings and ideas clearly * to enhance my writing * use a wide range of sentence beginnings and length * shape ideas for effect * use a wide range of vocabulary. Argument Glitter Writing

Retell W﻿r﻿iting

Retold by Shannon
 * "How Maui Slowed the Sun" ﻿Peter Gossage **

Long ago,nestled in a peaceful Maori village lived a strong brave boy called Maui and his brothers. People always complained that the sun was travelling at a speedy pace. The people of the village were groaning, grumbling and grizziling.

The tribe got together in the big meeting room which was packed. Maui got the women to make an enourmous, strong rope for the strong men. He chanted a karakia to the iron-baking hot sun.

When the sun began to rise, the men saw the red glare coming from the depth of the hole so they threw the mighty rope over the hole. Maui said a karakia to tell the men to pull harder. There was a mighty battle as Maui used a mere to beat the sun.

The sun called out in agony for the beating to stop. Maui made an agreement with the sun that if he goes more slowly, they will let him go. So now the sun is limping across the sky, the people in the village are happily playing and doing their chores.

Character ﻿ ﻿ Writing

Our Character Scrapbook "Danny Champion of the World" ** By Roald Dahl﻿ ** Danny's Father: Dressed in a navy-blue disguise poaching for pheasants in the light of the shimmering moon sneaks Danny's father William. By day he follows his passion of mechanics and lavishing love on Danny, the boy he cared for since his wife died. Danny's father was a fun-loving, amusing storyteller and a mysterious man. Dancing around in the centre of two brilliant, blue eyes a golden spark indicates that Danny's father is truly smiling. When his wife died the young man had a baby to raise... as the boy grew, he poured all his love upon him like the shower they didn't have in the old gypsy caravan they lived in. A mechanical miracle, Danny's father has a passion for all things that include: grease, oil, nuts, bolts and cogs and a clever handyman as well. Mischievous, fun loving and a wildly funny person, Danny can't wait for bedtime because his father is a magnificent story teller. Fit and athletic, Danny's Father strides off to the deep, dark woods to carry out his deep, dark secret.
 * Characters from the novel: **
 * Written by Ivan **
 * Written and Illustrated by Danielle **

After the death of his wife, a mechanical young man was left to care for his little baby Danny. The athletic, fit, mischievous, fun loving man lavished all the love he had for his wife on Danny. His brilliant blue eyes had a tiny golden spark dancing in the centre when he smiled. Even though he lived in a gyspy caravan he had a DEEP DARK secret, it is... poaching pheasants in Hazell's Wood, by moonlight! By day, he had a passion for grease, oil and car parts. Doc Spencer: A very ancient elf-like man by the name of Doc Spencer has tiny hands and feet and a tiny, brown, shrivelled apple face. A patch ﻿of wispy white hair hangs from the back of a shiny, bald head like a bowling ball. Smiling blue eyes peep through a pair of steel rimmed spectacles as he looks after the patients he has shown love and care to, for over forty five years. **Victor Hazell:** Whizzing along in his glistening, gleaming, silver rolls royce goes the roaring snob called Victor Hazell. Mischievous, he thinks he is more important than everyone else, so he thinks up evil plans to put people down. He drinks too much beer, his fat face goes pale pink like a ham. Skiting to everyone, he wears fancy waistcoats, leather boots and jewellery and a gentleman's hat. **Written by Sean**
 * Written by Mary **
 * Written by Cra﻿ig **

"Horton Hatches the Egg" ** by Dr Seuss **
 * Horton and Mayzie from the story book: **



Sitting patiently on the lazy bird's nest, which is balancing on a small tree, is an enormous pink creature. Even if Horton's friends were laughing at him, he would still sit there. Horton is a faithful friend who stuck to his word even if he was sick, hot or freezing.
 * Written by Sean **

Egg-sitting for lazy Mayzie is the enormous pink elephant who gave his elephant word. He is an emotional, faithfulful and funny elephant, who loves to help out other animals.
 * Written by Ewan **

Warm-hearted, trustworthy, intelligent elephant called Horton likes to sing crazy, funny songs. Horton a pinky, strawberry coloured elephant also likes to play with his fun, amusing friends. Horton, a lovable creature is brave, patient and strong as he calmly sits in the tree for months, egg-sitting to keep his promise. His chubby, adorable face looks like a cute little child sucking on a juicy, mouth-watering lollipop.
 * Written by Shannon **

Fluttering her eyelashes, puffing out her chest, Mayzie persuades Horton to sit on her nest. Deliberately lying, dishonest, cheating Mayzie leaves her nest and secretly knowing all the hard work will be done by the time she gets back, there will be a baby bird just one.
 * Written by Danielle **

A self-centred, work shy, independent, selfish, irresponsible bird. Lazy Mayzie returning from her charming rest at Palm Beach, ready to expect the impossible creature that came out of her egg. Descriptive Writing
 * Written by Ivan **

Our Task: Demonstrate our skill development of the student targets by effective use of language features to make a clear 'picture' for the audience.

Dazzling, shining, shimmering surf smashes and spits like a taniwha on the beach. Untravelled, national, native forest covers the mountains that are blue on the horizon.
 * Written by Max **

<span style="font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif; font-size: 120%;">Green and glimmering water merges with golden, brown sand. On a beach, the sun shines brightly and there are no people standing in sight. The guardian rocks standing stiff and tall, when you look behind you might recognize a dull, blue mountain <span style="font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif;">.
 * Written by Jasmine **

Deep, blue water falls and crashes wildly on the golden sand like a wave jumping in the fresh air. Meanwhile, the bush howls in the crazy wind and is being watched by the big boulder which looks like a giant's bouncy ball.
 * Written by Miharo **

Fresh, clear water looks beautiful rolling smoothly on the golden beach like water rushing down a hydroslide. Sharp, rough, rugged, uneven rock-face above an abandoned beach sitting on a rugged coast.
 * Written by Rueben **

Clear, shining transparent water turns into white waves of boiling foam as it washes the golden brown sand. With the distant bush covered mountains beyond, a lonely untravelled bounder welcomes explorers.
 * Written by Stafford **

<span style="background-color: #008080; display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 300%;">Poetry

<span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 150%;">We have been reading poems and studying poetry as a writing style. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 150%;">We have noticed that poetry has a different structure from prose. <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 150%;">We have been experimenting with different structures for our poems.

<span style="background-color: #00feff; display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 150%;">Our learning goal is : to demonstrate effective use of language features and language devices in our poems. <span style="color: #800080; display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 150%;">Our challenge to you is to find examples of these writing tools in our work: effective use of adjectives, metaphor, simile, personification, onamatopaeia, imagery.

<span style="display: block; font-family: 'Lucida Console',Monaco,monospace; font-size: 250%;">﻿The Old House

<span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">Worthless trees broken in terrible horror storms <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">Nail-less floor boards aching because of damage <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">Shattered windiws hiding secrets within <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">Twisted powerlines wrinkled by age <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">Fading daylight puts a shadow on the shed <span style="display: block; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 130%;">rusting in the distance.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 120%;">Written by Simon **

<span style="background-color: #008080; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 300%;">Point of View <span style="background-color: #008080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 300%;">Report Writing



<span style="background-color: #008080; display: block; font-family: 'Palatino Linotype','Book Antiqua',Palatino,serif; font-size: 300%;">Argument